Wednesday, 26 August 2015

The story about maleficent-draft

Make your own myth story 
This is a draft WALT create our own a Myth / legend 


Co-constructed SC:

keep your writing in order:
beginning, middle and end
make sure you have your plan
put it into your own words
use more interesting words, 
time connectives - suddenly, later, unexpectedly, meanwhile, next minute...after that
proof read your writing
highlighter strategy

Editing your story is a very important  - Make sure you read it through carefully and check:
Will your story make sense to your reader and will it interest them?
Have you given a satisfactory ending?
Is your spelling correct?
Make sure you have used a range of punctuation ,  .  !  “  “  ?  (  ) 
 Start a new paragraph for:
•A change of time, e.g. Early the next morning…
•A change of place e.g. On the other side of the mountain stood…
•A change of action e.g. At that moment the lights went out.
A change of character e.g. Unexpectedly, Dr Townley rounded the corner.

We are using the story mountain to help us  with our planning


Monday, 17 August 2015

Thursday, 6 August 2015

Two stars and a wish

Writing

The wedding with my family 👰👗💕

As I went with my family to the wedding and It  only took 10 minutes. We already knew what the ladies favourite colour was because everything  was blue. At the end we took  photos but  when I just wanted to come up the stage I hit myself.  
Then I got to the kids area and I got my  face painted it was a butterfly . The food was so good and I also made new friends. I wonder what there names are, ok as I was saying the food was cake juice and sweets in the kids area was a t.v face paint cops & robbers  and we did crazy things like dancing singing  and gymnastic after that we went in the car at last I can have a rest . Then I started to scream and I told my dad "can I go to the doctors".then my mum told my dad that Youssef was sick, my mum said "take her with u" so I said in a loud voice "Yah" , When we got there we found  a helium balloon in the car then me,and  my baby brother started to play with it in the hospital then she called my name and  I came to her. Then the phone rang it was my brother he thought that I had a broken leg "call me when you get your X-ray"







WALT write a recount about an idea we had in our writers notebook.

Success Criteria - Co constructed

My new buddy

I helped my buddy make this is Maori parts on her